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Searching for Learning by ~AndThenYouSaid:iconAndThenYouSaid:



     From the moment I enter I
am swallowed, engulfed. I become
another pair of shuffling, scuffed feet.
But oh, where do my feet take me? Among
these cerulean passageways that speak
               nothing
of the sea or the sky. Metallic and hollow,
the walls cry the echoes of fity years of
students, fifty years in that L-shaped
building.
     L for ludicrous, they might say. L for
liquid, languid learning that seeps through
brains and lies puddled on the floor,
splashed by those flip-flops and
Timberlands and Vans attached to
feet attached to bare legs or baggy legs
with bare stomachs or baggy stomachs
with heads--
               heads!
--in the asbestos clouds. Stormy skies
where Shakespeare cries, "'Sup, homie?"
and gaping locker mouths find Jane Eyre
and Lenny and Odysseus and Titania
crushed beneath the
               books books books
their brethren pages crushing them to
that literal literary oblivion.
     And what am I learning? Learning! Learning?
Where are you, dawg? 'Cause Lord knows if you
ain't in this building then I ain't gonna find you
          no wheres.
©2007-2009 ~AndThenYouSaid
:iconandthenyousaid:

Author's Comments

So. This was a History assignment. We're learning about the Beat Movement of the 1950's, which was a really rather charming nonconformist movement--minus the drugs--striving for higher consciousness through art and music. The point was to create a poem in that style, with the topic being school.

I'd say its similar to spoken-word, but not quite.
I sort of just threw it together at 11:00 last night, and this is my first try with anything of this style.

So this was my attempt.

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:iconcaptain-nia:
love it ^_^

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History Lesson:
Q: What could the Venitians do with sand and water?
A: Build sand castles

woah gallery: [link]
:iconsublimechord:
Wow. That's more coherent than anything I've written at eleven at night. More coherent than most things I've written in general.

I'm not very familiar with the style, so I cannot comment as to how well it fits the style.

I've always loved your usage of words. Things can be simple, but still convey meaning. More interestingly in this case is the use of slang terms being used in such a facinating manner.

Great job, as always. I love your poetry.

Keep it up.

-Sublime

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Everyone has a photographic memory. Some people don't have film.
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...in much wisdom is much grief: and he that increaseth knowledge increaseth sorrow. -Bible
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:iconandthenyousaid:
Wow thanks for the :+fav:!
I'm glad you liked it so much.

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Courage is the art of being the only one who knows you're scared to death.
-Harold Wilson
:iconandthenyousaid:
Thanks so much.
And yeah. Sometimes I have moments of brilliance when I'm stressed/overtired/resigned to my fate.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it though.
Really very glad.

-Rafe

--
Courage is the art of being the only one who knows you're scared to death.
-Harold Wilson
:iconsublimechord:
Good good. I'm sure there are some wording things here and there I could pick apart, but I don't think it's worth it. It sounds good.

-Sublime

--
Everyone has a photographic memory. Some people don't have film.
--
...in much wisdom is much grief: and he that increaseth knowledge increaseth sorrow. -Bible
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:iconcaptain-nia:
welcome muchly ^_^

--
History Lesson:
Q: What could the Venitians do with sand and water?
A: Build sand castles

woah gallery: [link]
:iconandthenyousaid:
Thank you very much! And thanks for the :+fav:

--
Courage is the art of being the only one who knows you're scared to death.
-Harold Wilson

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